Here's part of a series of poems I'm working on, I'm trying to write them like a symphony with different sections to form one larger work. I'm sure there's a name for that, but I don't know it. Yes, I know it's kind of "emo". Get over it! ;) It'll make sense in context eventually.
Hear the dark rain Pound on the windshield,
I down your warmth.
I am Silent. I am Screaming.
I catch your eyes.
Your eyes they Marvel. Your eyes are Masked.
Drink the delight Poured on our whispers,
We loose the way.
We are Naïve. We are Knowing.
Feel the thick air Pull apart and spoil,
You meet my fault.
I am Quiet. I am Crying.
Is the meter too obvious? How about the similar starting letters/sounds (P's, Qu-C, N-Kn, etc.)